Grade One-Reports-typed as written
Table of Contins
1.cachy stuf abowt seals page one
2. babieys page two
3 body page three
4 habitat page four
5 conclusion
cachy stuf
Art Art Art went the seasl. I will be talking about seals. Do you like seals?
Do you like babiey seals to? Seals eat fish and kril. Seals hav inimees thay are shark and killer wail and osow polar bears. Seals hav cuzens they are wallris and sea liyons. sum seals eat pingwins. Seals are wonderol swimers.
Babieys
Babiey seals play in the ice. Babiey seals are so cuoot. Babiey seals sent there mommy wen thay are lost. Babiey seals hav speshl cotes. Babiey seals cum out of it's mommy.
food
Sum seals eat pinwins. Seals also eat fish and kril. If a little seal geat's in a big seal waye, The big seal eat the littls seals, A babiey seals brink millk frum his mommy.
body
Seals cum in difrint colors. Seals hav long skiny wiskers., Seals hav black ies. Seals don't hav feet thay hav flipers. Seal hav arms. Seals body is made for being in the snow.
Habitat
Killer whale and hsarks and arctic wolves and peepl and osowe arctic foxis, kill seals peepl us seals for cotes and seals live in the ice and beech. Seals are not canivors.
conlcusion
I hope you ingiod my story I hav lirnd alot did you lirn alot to?
TEACHER COMMENTARY on Standard _____________________
Table of Contents
| Incruduchin | page 1 |
| Food | page 1 |
| Habitat | page 2 |
| Body | page 3 |
| Babies | page 3 |
| Conclooshgin | page 4 |
ror, said the pola bear. My report is about polar bears. I am going to tell you about what They look like where they live, about their babies, and whar they eat. Polar bear eat dolphins fish and seal. They eat to have stong bones, Do you like to have stong bones. The next thing I am going to tell you us about
How they love and where they live in ice. They live someplaec that are cold. We are not in the cold, Do you like the cold? Polar bears live in icy water they live in snow. They need lots of cold. do you like the cold? Polar bear have more cold and us. Polar bear have fur to keep them warm. Polar bear have white fur. Polar bear body are sotff. Polar bear carry the cub to hunt. Polar bears have babies when it is cold. Polar bear cub come from there stomache I told you all about polar bear. I hope you learned all about what polar bear do.
TEACHER's Commentary: These pieces have met the first grade standard for report writing.
These
samples include a catchy introduction sentence to engage the reader
and introduce the topic.
Corey- “Art, Art, Art went the seals.”
Lakishma- “roar’, said the polar bear”
These samples include many concrete details and an impressive number of facts. While the reader sees some repetition, the reports clearly identify defined categories (food, habitat, body, and babies). Though some facts are repeated the writers demonstrate a growing ability to communicate with readers by using details to develop their points;
Lakishma-
“they live someplace that is cold. We are not in the cold. Do you
like the cold?”
Corey- “If a little seal gets in a big seal’s way, the big seal eats
the little seal.”
In each report, you will find the information is appropriate to the topic and all extraneous information extracted. Each piece includes a diagram of their chosen animal to further educate the reader.
All
pieces include a strong sense of closure or signing off.
Lakishma- I hope you learned all about what a polar bear does…
Corey- “I hope you enjoyed my story. I have learned a lot. Did you
learn a lot to?”
A next step for these writers would be to incorporate subheadings such as chapter subheadings seen in books.